A sound flutters around me in a distant sort of way, a voice as ethereal as a whisper, speaks my name, “Sherri, Sherri.”
Strange…I’m the only one here in the dwindling afternoon, waiting for darkness to swallow sunlight…“Sherri, Sherri.”
Through the haze, shadows with human faces drift through a dimly lit room; my mother stands before them, behind her a mahogany box lays dripping with flowers. She blots an eye with a tissue. “Sherri, we miss you;” her voice shudders as she speaks my name, “Sherri, Sherri.”
I’m participating in Lillie McFerrin’s Five Sentence Fiction prompt. This week’s prompt – Whisper.
Lovely take on the word, a lost, ethereal soul caught in a mother’s grief…
Thank you, Lisa. Very nicely stated: a lost, ethereal soul caught in a mother’s grief.
You knocked this one out of the park, and me with it. Excellent, Lauren. One of your best ever. This one will stay with me.
Thank you!! I love writing these short pieces because I never know where I’m going until I’m done.
This so beautiful.. Soft, warm and sad.
Wonderfully written..
Thank you so much. I’m hooked on Five Sentence Fiction.
Oh! A surprising turn around that makes this story exceptional, the witness to this scene is actually the one who is being mourned. Excellent!
Thank you, Josie.
I didn’t know there was going to be a surprise at the end until I finished it.
This is very well done! I love the twist!
Thanks Ann!!! I used to write noir short stories. And I thought a short story was short. : ) I should start writing longer pieces again, other than the memoir I’m trying to get placed with an agent.
Wow, this one was sad and a bit spooky at the same time.
Thank you, Phil!
I love writing spooky stuff as much as I like writing funny stuff. I’m going to find that link you gave me on Twitter and read the article.
This is beautiful; a mother’s grief only but a whisper, as eternal darkness awaits. x
Thank you. A mother’s grief has no bounds.
I liked this – it’s a different way of looking at the scene. Strangely peaceful, yet it’s not…
Thank you. I guess it is disturbing.
You’re so damn good at this. Your words captivate. Love it.
Thank you so much, June.
I keep working the writing muscle.
June, you should also give Five Sentence Fiction a whirl. You would be great at it, too.
You’ve managed to convey a lot of feeling in only five sentences, Lauren. Nicely done!
Thanks Nicky. You should participate in the weekly Five Sentence Fiction prompts. You’d be great at it.
Such a short post but packed with so many things. A little scary at one point but I enjoyed it.
Thanks so much for stopping by. I’m glad you enjoyed it.
absolutely exceptional work!
Thanks Meleah. How are you feeling? Has the flu flown?
a great ethereal twist 🙂
Thanks!!!!